Narrative writing

 These are my writing goals.

My Writing Goals - Taylah:)

Not yet	Developing	Got it!

My story flows and I use punctuation for effect
I have an interesting hook
I have a good organisation (paragraphs help reader with the orientation, problem, complication, solution)
I have used , . ?!  correctly within direct speech
I have short sentences for impact and longer sentences to build detail
I have used wow words (verbs, adjectives, nouns)
I have figurative language ( simile, metaphor, idiom personification)
I mostly use show not tell
I have a wide variety of  sentence starters
I have a 2A, double ly; de;de;  simile; verb, person sentence; 3 ed; emotion word, sentence; P.C sentence. ( comment on them)
I can give, and respond to, peer and teacher feedback to improve my work and my friend’s.
My writing goals are...
Use show not tell (describe something instead of saying what it is). Use short sentences for impact. Use wow words. Figurative language.

Wringer

 In class, we have been reading a book called Wringer. It is a book about a boy named Palmer who is supposed to become a Wringer at the age of 10 all he wants is friends. Anyways, here is my comprehension of the first 5 chapters of this book. 

Courage

In devotions, we have been learning about courage. There are many courageous people in history and in the world right now. This work is about courageous people and why courageous people are needed in the world.

Credible - Believable

 Great authors make characters with believable personalities. They show personalities through these: Actions, Dialogue (direct speech), Reactions, Physical descriptions, and thoughts. 

I can see this in Beans character. He is obnoxious and very disrespectful you can see this when Beans leaned across the table, took a deep breath and blasted away. The flames of the candles vanished. Beans has no table manners or no manners in general. Beans was scooping chocolate icing from the birthday cake onto his finger. With the drama of a sword-swallower, he threw back his head and sank his finger into his mouth. When it came out, it was clean. In this part of the book, him being obnoxious and disrespectful is clearly shown. The author has used actions and dialogue really well to give Beans a consistent obnoxious personality.

Probability

 Here is some of my work on probability.

The Tunnel by Anthony Browne

 We read Anthony Browne's book called The Zoo it is a very good children's book.  We were then tasked to find the message and our understanding on this book so here is my understanding.

Waterslides🏄

 In class, we have been learning about figurative language. We learned about personification, alliteration, and assonance. We also learned a new sentence structure - Some;others. I used some of them in my recount. This recount is about the waterslides we went to.

“Ready?” My mum asked with no excitement (never really wanted to go). Here I was at our

hotel with my mum and brothers. It was a really nice hotel an hour out of Auckland, a nice

geothermal bath out the back with a fence for privacy, comfy beds, it even had a nice

bathroom and right across the road were some hot pools with two of the biggest water

slides I have ever seen. The time was five pm, the evening sunlight smiled from above us as

it slowly set. We were just leaving our unit and the slides were still in sight as they towered over every other

building around. We walked over to the pools, and my Mum paid for the swimming fee then

straight to the slides. “Last up is the loser,” I heard Aden say cheekily before he sprinted

up with Kaine chasing behind him.”I'm not going to try, I just ate dinner and I don’t even

feel like swimming” I thought to myself.

Slowly, I made my way up the many floors, with each of them taunting me.“Taylah are you

almost here?” I heard Kaine yell from the top of the slide “Yeah, yeah I’m coming” I replied

being on the final floor of the ‘tower.’ I made it. I was finally up, the sun that was once up a

few minutes ago had set and the slide looked like a black hole; a portal to another dimension.

“Go!” I heard and saw Kaine yell at Aden as they raced down the slide until they were out of

my sight. “Do I really want to go down?” 

“Three, two, one” I whispered to myself as I sped down the slide clutching the mat I was

using, I couldn’t see any of my surroundings I turned a corner swiftly, then another, then

the mat that was once under had left me behind, my head hit the sides of the slide spinning

me backwards? To be honest, I had no idea what I was doing till I saw a dim light reflecting

against the side of the slide. With a splash, I landed into a….. pool? I swam to the top gasping for air and opening my eyes to see that I was finished. I laughed and went back up

for another round. This time I would try to make it less painful.

I went for many more rounds even though the walk-up was hard; almost too hard. It was

worth it because the only really bad thing was the migraine I had, we were there for hours.

Some people hate pools and slides; others love the thrill of them. Personally, I loved it. The

pool was really nice as well and I know for a fact that I would really like to go back to that

place again.