Creative recount

This is a story made from my imagination in the form of a recount. I have been learning how to use complex punctuation such as dashes, semi-colons, and colons, etc. My next step is probably to create suspense and use more descriptive language. Enjoy:)

Lost

“Wait up!!”I heard Maki yell from behind, “we should wait” I said to Toge, as I looked over

my shoulder to see Maki scurrying around the rocks trying to catch up. “Nah, she’ll catch

up” Toge replied “But-” “Just hurry up the tunnels are right there,” He said in a stern

voice. Toge dragged me behind a bush “What are you doing the tunnels are right there-”

“Shut up,” He said as he covered my mouth with his hand; tired, worn-out

Maki trampled towards the iron doors calling for us, before slowly going inside the

pitch-black, gun tunnels. 

10 minutes later, Maki was still inside. I began to feel worried and Toge must’ve too because

he stood up and walked towards the heavy iron door before hauling it open. I looked into

the dark nothingness, I followed close behind him. I was terrified at the very least but I

didn’t want to stay outside in the forest by myself or look like a chicken. I switched on my

torch, trailing behind Toge. As we went deeper and deeper into the tunnels the world

around us became engulfed in darkness, the only light was the torch as it lit up the cold

cement path in front of us. “Maki!” I screamed out into the darkness… No response except

for the echoes of my own voice. “This is your fault” I complained “How?” He snapped back

“I told you to wait but nooo, you wanna play pranks on her. “Now she’s lost and we might be

too.” I huffed. We walked quietly listening closely for Maki.

“Toge?” A voice with a hint of fear shrieked out. I pointed the torch to the tunnel on the

right to see the faint shadow of Maki. “Maki over here!” I screeched. I apologized for

leaving her by herself, Toge said nothing. Then…Bang! Some of the old artillery down the

staircase had toppled over. But how? I froze. With no second thoughts, Maki grabbed my

hand running and dragging me away, the sound of claws scratching against the cement walls

rang out, taunting me. Though it snapped me back into reality, I ran fast, faster than I

ever have; having not the slightest idea where I was going or where I was supposed to go.

There it was, the dim light shone inside giving me a sense of hope. I was out. I fell to the

ground, panting from exhaustion. Everything had happened so fast-almost too fast.

On the walk back to Maki and Toge’s home, not a word was said. “I still think it was your

fault,” I muttered to Toge, “Was not.” He said nastily, “Don’t lie,” I  argued. We went

back and forth. “Shut up!” Maki yelled. We remained quiet, only the sound of crickets

echoed throughout the forest. We finally arrived at the house. I was done, I vowed to

myself that I would never, ever go back there again. Even if my life depended on it.